Final Draft
There are some negative things, that's because too many people in Seoul. First, by high population in Seoul, unbalanced development becomes in between country and capital. As you know, welfare, education and government facilities are well organized in Seoul. Whereas, country people have no chance to enjoy those kinds of system as much as Seoul residents. So, if rural people need surgical operations which are required advanced medical skills, they have to come up Seoul. Sometimes, they move to Seoul with passion of their children's good education.
Also, this unbalanced development causes competition. Of course, competition has not always a bad meaning but, overpopulation manipulates bad side of competition. For example, in Seoul, to get an employment, 4000 of people apply for one position.
In the end, these excessive competition brings about selfishness. urban people don't considerate other people any more. Rather, they try to ignore others for their profits. To be winner, people work alone, and they never think about cooperation. This mind makes our society desolated.
2007년 9월 19일 수요일
2007년 9월 18일 화요일
Draft(Outline)
1. Unbalance development between coutry and capital.
- Welfare, education, government facilities are well organized in seoul.
- Country people have to come up seoul because surgical operation and high passion of education.
2. Unbalance development cause Competition.
- Because of too much population, competition being grew up.
- To get a employment, 4000 of people come togather toward one position.
3. Competition social cause Selfish.
- People do not give consideration to each other and ignore them.
- To be winner, people work alone and didn't cooperation.
- Welfare, education, government facilities are well organized in seoul.
- Country people have to come up seoul because surgical operation and high passion of education.
2. Unbalance development cause Competition.
- Because of too much population, competition being grew up.
- To get a employment, 4000 of people come togather toward one position.
3. Competition social cause Selfish.
- People do not give consideration to each other and ignore them.
- To be winner, people work alone and didn't cooperation.
2007년 9월 8일 토요일
Writing Exercises
10. My favorite animal is a dolphin because he looks free. When he is swimming ins the ocean, I'm so jealous. He could swim anywhere he wants. I think he presents the liberty.
9. I really love going to dance clubs. Dandce clubs let me dance freely. Because everybody is dancing in that places, so I don't need to be concern about other people's eye s. I like listening music too.
8. It's shocking if you didn't know how many people, including young girls and boys, smoke. It's getting a serious problem in our society. More important thing is smoking cigaratte is much more dangerous for young people than adults. It disturbs growth of children.
9. I really love going to dance clubs. Dandce clubs let me dance freely. Because everybody is dancing in that places, so I don't need to be concern about other people's eye s. I like listening music too.
8. It's shocking if you didn't know how many people, including young girls and boys, smoke. It's getting a serious problem in our society. More important thing is smoking cigaratte is much more dangerous for young people than adults. It disturbs growth of children.
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